My first CBT story - One hour at Amber's barn (needs review)
I'm writing my first femdom, CBT and castration story, and I'm in need of active feedback while working on it. Since it's my first time I'd like to have a lot of advice so please take your time to leave your thoughts in a comment if you feel so. Please keep in mind English is not my first language so help me spot typos/grammar inconsistencies (when not done on purpose)/idioms poorly used. Enjoy and share the love <3
PS: I'm gonna post like 500 words at a time so don't expect the story to finish in one post (it's a book!). SPOILER: There will be ballbusting sessions and a lot of castration talks (and activities), that's why I'm posting here even if the story seems innocent at first glance. Just be patient please. Needless to say all rights are reserved, do not plagiarize my story here or other sites.
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*One hour at Amber’s barn - Pt.1*
A shy light was rising, when Jennifer wiggled his boyfriend out of his sleep using her bare foot.
“ Hey Martin! Wake up! You’ll make me late! ”
“... What the... Jenn, what... time is it? ”
Jenn briefly stood beside his half conscious body, slowly contorting under the sheets. Her freshly red polished nails stretched out to cure.
“ Late. Get moving or you’ll wait here till I’m back. ”
“ No need I’m... *Yaawn*... waking... ”
They were clearly living at two different speeds. Jennifer is exactly like this: an energetic force of nature, a curious explorer, an emotional traveler trusting her guts. Martin on the other hand, was more like a slow, peaceful, rational creature of habit.
By the time Martin walked naked in the kitchen to grab a coffee, Jennifer joined him wrapped in a pair of baggy jeans and a loose checked shirt. Her nipples springing through clothes made clear she wasn’t wearing a bra. Martin’s dangly bits had a twitch imaging her body under there and Jenn was captured by the scene, because after a short glance at his manhood, reached to squeeze him in a hug.
“ I’ve never seen you dressed like that, where ya going again? ”
“ Do I have to say everything twice? “
Her judging stare lovely rose to catch his eyes, unveiling a glimpse of the generous cleavage squeezed against Martin’s trunk.
“ Anna texted if I can help her at the ranch today. She’s expecting a busy day and want all help possible. It’s quite a ride to be honest, but she promised I wouldn’t regret it... Wanna come? ”
“ Well, I mean, not quite, especially after last night... But I have a day off so if you ask me kindly enough, maybe... ”
“ Like you have better to do, *uh*? If you put it in these terms, then let’s say if you politely come with me, I’ll make sure to give you another night like the last one... ”
She said as sensual as possible, and successfully, as she felt Martin’s dick lightly pulsating to her belly. This is getting exciting, maybe a little too quick. Jenn free the man from the grasp, making sure to rub his gonads with her leg along the way.
“ Better be quick then, you’re already late!”
Said taking a step back and watching his semi stiff rod hanging. One red nail running along the shaft for a long second.
“ You have 5 minutes to cover with something and reach me in the car. ”
She always knew how to reverse Martin’s nature to be late, and she made no mistake. Sipped her last coffee and left Martin speechless in the room, waddling through the kitchen door.
Within five minutes Martin showed up in jeans and t-shirt, taking the driving seat.
“ So where we go? Which way? ”
Martin faked interest in the cause, infected by her enthusiasm.
“ Take the left, I’m checking the address Anna sent. ”
The engine began with a sudden roar, its tires squeaking on the morning dew damp asphalt. Another five minutes later the car was sailing flawlessly the blue path on the screen, taking the first step of the one and a half hours needed to arrive in the countryside.
*END of pt.1 > continue in pt.2*